Very exciting! I'd say you could stop there, but if you still want to massage some more, here are some thoughts. First, make sure the upper part of the hair doesn't get too pale (it looks like you have an overlay of a white, mostly transparent, area that makes it all paler; since he's close to us AND the main subject, I'd darken the dark parts of the hair to get the contrast on the top of the head **closer** to the contrast at the tip of his hair, near his neck and shoulder). Next, the red stone on the arm rest of the chair is the only red in the image and so it gets some underserved attention and begs for a meaning that doesn't get resolved. I'd pick another, less ostentatious, color. There's a tiny "tangent" (really, it's more of an unintentional continuing line) on the fold of the right sleeve of your character, matching a background gray line. Offset the two just a little more to "break" that continuing line. It seems to me that the left hand (on the bottom right of the composition) is too long from the wrist to the first knucles (or else too thin). I'm not sure what the gray bar is that's going down vertically behind the character's shoulder. Maybe it will read better if larger? Finally, I'd encourage you to color your shadows a bit more (cool tones spring to mind). Now, all these items, Jasmine, are details. You've got a very strong illustration already! Very slick, attractive, dramatic, and intriguing!
really nice! =)
ReplyDeleteVery exciting! I'd say you could stop there, but if you still want to massage some more, here are some thoughts. First, make sure the upper part of the hair doesn't get too pale (it looks like you have an overlay of a white, mostly transparent, area that makes it all paler; since he's close to us AND the main subject, I'd darken the dark parts of the hair to get the contrast on the top of the head **closer** to the contrast at the tip of his hair, near his neck and shoulder). Next, the red stone on the arm rest of the chair is the only red in the image and so it gets some underserved attention and begs for a meaning that doesn't get resolved. I'd pick another, less ostentatious, color. There's a tiny "tangent" (really, it's more of an unintentional continuing line) on the fold of the right sleeve of your character, matching a background gray line. Offset the two just a little more to "break" that continuing line. It seems to me that the left hand (on the bottom right of the composition) is too long from the wrist to the first knucles (or else too thin). I'm not sure what the gray bar is that's going down vertically behind the character's shoulder. Maybe it will read better if larger? Finally, I'd encourage you to color your shadows a bit more (cool tones spring to mind). Now, all these items, Jasmine, are details. You've got a very strong illustration already! Very slick, attractive, dramatic, and intriguing!
ReplyDeleteI like the textures you used!
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